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SORTIE

This story had a lot of good ideas but I couldn't really follow what was going on. I
thought that the narrative paragraphs made complete sense.... Then I would get to the
dialogue and be scratching my head. I think the dialogue is where you lost me. Your
character has a good strong voice... I can feel her emotions. Also your descriptions of
people and the coffee shop were really good. I knew exactly what it looked like or what
the person looked like.
I didn't feel like the story had good movement... it didn't seem to flow very well. That
was the only thing that I think was really wrong with the story. It seemed like you were
jumping back and forth between different fragments of this girls life.... And I could
really follow the general ideas. I realized that you were saying something about the
concept of life and how different people were but I guess I didn't really understand what
you wanted me to understand. 
One thing that may help the story just look better is the font.... It really confused me.
I think it made me cross-eyed.... But that just could have been me. I really loved the
girls character.... She was hilarious... I just got lost when she started talking. Maybe
if you just shaped up the dialogue a bit it would be a masterpiece. I couldn't figure out
the general motive of the story... or really the plot. However, I could have just totally
missed the entire point. The story was really funny though.